Heya, now you've done 50 pages and completed "chapter one" or whatever, are you going to publish a special bumper-sized better-quality paper edition? The only thing I'd maybe critique is that Manzil seems pretty much relaxed and otherwise occupied on p 49 and then on p 50 he's freaking out about the time. I'll go back and look at p. 49 again, maybe he's noticing a clock or whatever, but I think you could make that transition a bit clearer. But then again, I still got that he'd reallized he was late and leapt up and got dressed so maybe its not that much of an issue - just a little abrupt.
I was hoping that turning the page is enough of a transition to hint that time has passed. It might have been better to insert another scene with the women to help us past the time gap. But I wanted to get the chapter finished: I’m a little tired of blue. :-)
I’d like to have a printed version for Caption; I’ve been having technical difficulties (as they say), so we’ll have to see.